Friday, March 19, 2010

Juana's Fanfiction

Miracle of Love

My fan fiction is based on the movie" Australia", it is one of my favorite movies about love, war, separation and reunion. I changed the ending a little bit of how they reunited and made it more exciting.

Introduction

This is a love story which happened in Darwin during the 1930's, Sarah Ashley came from London to meet her husband in the Faraway Downs farm of Darwin. Before Sarah arrived, her husband was murdered by Neil Fletcher who worked for him and wanted to have Lord Ashley's farm to himself. An aboriginal boy Nullah and cowboy Drover helped Sarah Ashley successfully to 1500 cattles and to keep the farm running. Sarah fell in love with Drover later and they brought up Nullah together, three different person from three different background constructed a happy family.

In 1939, Japan attacked Darwin, this happy family was broken up but miracle has happened -they were reunited , this fanfiction is about how this family reunited again.

Sarah was very excited that morning , she knew that she will have Nullah home again since he was taken to the Mission Island with other boys. She misses him everyday and could not wait for this day to come.

She changed shift with Cath Fletcher who worked with her in the telecommunication centre. She walked with enthusiasm and was singing to herself. Ivan asked her: " Hi, Sarah, why are you so happy today?" She said: " I will go to pick up my boy. He will be back from Mission Island today!" then she hugged Ivan and said goodbye to him. No one knew the war was coming.


After a few hours, lines of airplanes from Japan attacked the Darwin. The city collapsed by bombs immediately, there were fire and dead bodies everywhere . The building where Sarah worked was fully destroyed , people thought Sarah was dead. Mission Island was attacked as well. Nullah might have died as well.

Drover was far away from Darwin when he saw many cars and trucks passed by, he realized that something wrong has happened. He immediately thought about Sarah and Nullah. He had an argument with Sarah a few weeks ago about Nullah and anger lead him leaving his family. " Are they safe?". Morgarri(Drover's ex-brother-in-law) blamed him :"You shouldn't have left them, you know how much Sarah loves you, you should go to look for them." Before Morgarri finishes his sentence, Drover already rode the horse and left.

When they came back to Darwin. The messy scene shocked them and Ivan told them that Sarah died, Drover cried:" It is all my fault, if i didn't leave her, she wouldn't die!" Suddenly, he thought about Nullah, " I should go save him."

They went to Mission Island and saved all the boys from the killer Japanese soldiers. Drover took the boys back home by a ship.Nullan asked Drover "Where is Mrs Boss? ( He always called Sarah this)". Drover said: " We can't say her name anymore. "( The custom of aborigine is if a person dies, people are not allowed to say his/her name anymore.)

When the ship came back to Darwin, Sarah has already left, she went to England with Sir Emmet's army. Drover and Nullah went back to Far Away Downs to keep running the farm that Sarah has left for them, they started their ordinary life again but they all realise that things will never be the same without Sarah, they still love her very much and she is deep in their heart.

After a few months of living in London Sarah decided to go back to Far Away Downs and run her farm again. She wanted stay where good memories of Nullah and Drover were kept, eventhough she knows that they are not going to be there.

One day, Nullah saw a car coming to Far Away Downs , he climbed to the water tower and looked at the car from up high. The car stopped and a lady got off from the car with a long skirt, a tight shirt and a hat, she held an umbrella in her hand." She looks like Mrs Boss, no, it is impossible, I can't say her name anymore." Nullah came down from the water tower and went near the car to look at that lady more closely and clearly. He could not believe his eyes." Mrs Boss, Mrs Boss, is that you?"

Sarah was shocked :" My God, is this Nullah? Nullah! " She threw the dropped the umbrella, ran to the Nullah and held him up in her arms . " Nullah, I thought you .. I missed you Nullah!" She cried. " Mrs Boss, they said I couldn't say your name anymore." "Nullah, tell me how did you survive and who looks after you now?" Nullah expressed his happiness with a tricky smile ,"Take a guess , Mrs Boss!" Sarah was all confused and had no idea...

The familiar voice appeared, "Nullah, do we have visitors here?" "Drover!" Sarah couldn't control herself and ran to him, Drover was surprised and then shouted:" Sarah, is that you? Am I dreaming?" "Drover , it is her! We can say Mrs Boss's name again!"Nullah shouted.

" I love you Sarah , I will never let you go anymore!" Drover held Sarah tightly in case he loses her again. Sarah said" I love you too, I'm going to be with you forever Drover." Nullah, Sarah and Drover have finally reunited and the three people are back as a perfect family. They lived in Faraway Downs Farm happy ever after.

16 comments:

  1. Are you finished? I am not sure because your story doesn't seem to have a real end or so..? (=*_*=)
    Also... I think you might tell a bit too much about what happens in the movie and not so much about your own ideas for the story. (In case this is not your complete FF yet but rather some kind of introduction I am sorry - didn't know (=^_~=)

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  2. Thanks, just started it, not finished yet. Will add some introduction. Cheers.

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  3. My fan fiction is finished but I feel that I only use some common words and sentence, not really fantastic,will work more on it.

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  4. I just started reading again...
    One thing I just thought: maybe you habe a good Idea for a nice title???

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  5. Good idea, will add a nice title.

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  6. One thing I am not sure... Does your Introductuion belong to the story or is it an extra part to explain the background to the reader?
    Also I think you don't really need those titles for the paragraphs, just a nice, interesting one for the whole FF would be grate!

    I can't remember the whole movie anymore... but it still seems to me as if you mostly retell the existing story?

    Anyway I am happy that you described some parts better now... easier to understand now! (=^_^=)

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  7. I have the similar feeling with Sila. The title doesn’t appear to relate with the theme of your story closely, and you probably can consider to add more information about the site. In addition, in the part of “attacked”, I think if there are more emotional descriptions about the reunion between Dover and Nullah, that will help to increase the affecting effect to your story.

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  8. I guess "Miracle of Love" is a good title
    (=^_^=)
    made the whole story much better already! Haha..

    we have to fix some grammar somehow... not sure how to start..??? I will think about it!
    (=^_~=)

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  9. Thank you very much , I will take off the title of each paragraph.
    The introduction is whole story of this movie, but my story is just a little part of this story. According the movie, I changed the end of the part how they reunited? Will add more in the part of reunion. Thanks.

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  10. Big change now, take off all the title for every paragraph and made a new stroy for their reunion, it is quite excting story for their reunion. Thanks everyone.

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  11. Well done, Juana! the latest change really is better than the previous one.
    haha,I wondered if there is a small spelling mistake in this sentence :"You shouldn't have leaf them, you know how much Sarah loves you, you should go to look for them.", "leaf" should be "left"?

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  12. Thanks Freda, It is a spelling mistake, I will fix it now.

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  13. just read the comments now... curious about how you edited it!!! (=0_0=)

    *goes reading*

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  14. *finished*

    oh, really nice, you improved a lot! I really like how you use the "we can't say her name anymore" thing through the end... d(=~_^=)
    did you also do something about the spelling and such? seems better now as well or is that only my imagination??? (=o_O=)

    anyway... a few little somethings:

    1st paragraph:
    "and maKE it more exciting" --> MADE

    2nd paragraph:
    "this is a love story __ happened..." --> maybe "story WHICH happened"?? i think sounds a bit better...???
    and:
    when you say nullah and drover helped her you already have past. the "SOLD" should be "TO SELL" then and "KEPT" "TO KEEP".

    6th paragraph: Darwin doesn't need "THE"
    and:
    "SUDDENLY" is kind of mhm... it sounds like a surprise but someone throws bombs it is not really 'sudden' and surprising that everything is destroyed... sound a bit like... "i dropped the vase and suddenly is was broken" LOL just my feeling about it... maybe another word? dunno...

    13th paragraph (I think)
    "i miss you" --> I missED you

    and have a close look.... at some spots you spelled "nullaH" with "N" instead of "H" in the end!

    ok.... hope it helps (=^_^=)

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  15. Thank you very much , Sila, you are the big help for me to finish this fanfiction. All the suggestions you gave to me are really helpful.
    Also you read very carefully and can tell most of mistakes I made.
    Thanks again for your help, I amended all the details you mentioned. Hopefully , it is a fantastic fanfiction.

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  16. I havn't seen the movie Australia before but through what you have written, it sounds like an interesting story..
    I also like the way that you describes Sarah's emotions through different expressions..
    Would be awsome if the ending had a little bit more details though
    BUT NICE WORK over all^^

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